On the Lake Bed

2 thoughts on “On the Lake Bed”

  1. Angela! Another great reflective story. You are starting to sound like a published author. And I don’t mean only on a self-published blog!

    I love your style.

    As you know, I don’t give out praise easily, (and you might even think my praise disingenuous if I didn’t opine about a a misplaced comma, below). But this p[iece deserves praise. It’s a wonderfully written . . . what . . . short story? Reflective essay? Sunday-Paper column material?

    Whatever you call it, I really like the way it made me* feel.* You provide both your listeners and co-travelers a positive emotional buoyancy in a place where hopes for actual buoyancy had been summarily dashed. .

    Thank you.

    And just so you’ll know it’s* really *from me, and that I genuinely read it, here’s my unsolicited questioning of your comma placement!

    Is it be misplaced – or unnecessary. It’s the one following the word “several”. I see the trouble though. It could go after “old”, but then it almost gives the feeling several and old should be hyphenated, doesn’t it? Could it be left out entirely? Or what about a new word entirely. See my ideas below. And feel free to dismiss all of them, as this may just be my way of trying to feel relevant!

    Your sentence: There we saw several, old craggy stumps, remnants of days when this was a fast flowing river winding through a fertile corn field.

    Your sentence without the comma: There we saw several old craggy stumps – remnants of days when this was a fast flowing river winding through a fertile corn field.

    Your sentence avoiding the comma dilemma: There we saw a truncated forest of old craggy stumps, remnants of days when this was a fast flowing river winding through a fertile corn field.

    Thanks Angie!

    *Jimmy Harris*President Harris Communications http://www.clearonhold.com 706.886.4321 (w) 706.491.6340 (c)

    On Wed, Feb 8, 2017 at 11:09 AM, Angelina’s Garden wrote:

    > Angelina posted: “On the upper reaches of Lake Hartwell, just south of the > mountains where the lake gives way to river and the city gives way to > country we have a house. In this remote section of the lake, even during > seasons of high water, we seldom in a single day see ” >

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    1. Jimmy, thank you for your encouraging words! I appreciate them, especially from you, a technical grammarian. I am definitely not one, knowing just enough to do what I gotta do! 😉
      I could actually use an editor! This last piece I posted with only one look ever from Matt. My college student editors were all “too busy.” What do you think about editing from time to time?

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